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As the water follows the moon (my story inspired by Patrick Kelly)
05-03-2011, 04:10 PM
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PS: I hope the end of your story is not near! Smile

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05-03-2011, 04:36 PM
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Wow yes
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05-04-2011, 07:57 AM (This post was last modified: 05-04-2011 07:58 AM by fontedivina.)
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Thanks to everyone who reads it! Ylinlove

(05-03-2011 04:10 PM)_Mai_ Wrote:  PS: I hope the end of your story is not near! Smile

There will be 15 chapters! yes



5. There was a little boy out in the country…

In the very first days at the monastery Teddy understood that he has done the right choice. His disarrayed soul needed exactly this silence, peace, solitude, concentration over praying and contemplation of God. Teddy began his healing from the first seconds of being there. Now he had no doubts about his decision.
However Teddy had no time for the outside thoughts because the monastery schedule was strict. His brain was always involved with something. If he wasn’t praying – alone or together with his brothers - he was studying theology and reading religious books. Now if he ever thought about what he has left behind it was with a light sadness. He didn’t regret what he no longer had, he was happy to ever have it at all.

…Lately they’ve been living outside the city in a big and fancy-looking castle. There were so many rooms that it was easy to get lost and in the roof there was a helicopter ground. The family bought this house especially for gathering together but this never has really happened although Teddy was living there all the time just like two of his un-married sisters and their father. The castle was too huge and Teddy was feeling very lonely there but he was too lazy to seek an apartment. Besides, in the city he couldn’t make a quiet living but here he lived like in a Medieval fortress.

And there were times when they lived in a double-decker bus! They were like vagrant musicians constantly moving from place to place and in the evenings presenting their simple performances to the respectful audience. Teddy liked thinking about his family in this way and paying no attention to difficulties of such a life but only getting pleasures from the work they loved so much and that endless freedom they used to have then.
Teddy enjoyed remembering his parents and his happy childhood they have given to him. He wished he could come back to those careless days! To become again that light-hearted boy who pierced his ears and wrote his first love songs not knowing this very love but only longing for it and dreaming about it with his whole soul…
He remembered his first performances with his mum. He was very small and barely realized himself or the world around but these impressions were so strong that stayed with him for all his life. Mum danced with baby Martha in her arms. She laughed and her laugh gave Teddy shivers and everything looked beautiful. For the first time he felt happy being on the stage and deeply fell in love with it. He adored even nervousness that he felt before performances.
During the concerts Teddy liked not only singing but going crazy and making people laugh. He wore kilt and jumped on the stage as possessed making different acrobatic tricks and showing his legs to spectators but this was not enough for his insatiable soul. Step by step he provided himself with the whole armory that he used on each performance invariably making his fans fall into wild delight. Teddy drove on his older brother Timmy’s neck, poured water from a bottle over playing drums Gabe, turned somersaults, sang and played guitar lying on stage, improvised a lot and always stayed the center of everyone’s attention and attraction. Teddy’s each appearance was accompanied with especially load screams and applause and his brothers and sisters soon got used to it. So he has found his vocation.
First, he understood that nothing made him as happy as performance in front of audience whatever it may be. Second, he saw that he could make other people happy with his music. And third, Teddy realized that he was special. He wildly loved his family but even close to his siblings he felt like a stranger. And he preferred to imagine that he was an alien from another planet only looking like one of Reily brothers. He made himself a legend according to which he was sent to Earth with a special mission and Teddy was going to complete it at any cost.

Mum’s death was the first shock in still unclouded Teddy’s life. He was only five when it happened and he didn’t realized many things but he cried a lot. Mum meant light, warmth and love for him. He remembered her like this.
But since their mother had to leave her kids so early, their father has lived long and fulfilled life. Teddy understood that all their success belonged to their father with his endless love to music. He has cultivated this love in the hearts of all his children since their first days. Besides he gave them a very good upbringing and education.
Like the rest of the Reilys Teddy never came to school. From their mother they have learned to sing and dance and their father has taught them foreign languages, playing different musical instruments and other sciences. Thus Teddy from his early age could freely speak six languages and played guitar, piano, accordion, drums and God knows what else. All brothers and sisters turned out to be very talented – especially in everything concerning music. Probably usual school would never have given them what they got studying by themselves.
And also their father taught them to love other people, helped to develop their natural kindness and compassion. The Reily kids grew up into remarkable young people and each of them dreamed of having in the future a big and harmonious family as their parents used to have.

Teddy liked remembering his childhood a lot, but more often the thoughts about those fatal days that have changed his life for good came to him…

to be continued...

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05-04-2011, 10:22 AM
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Timmy Big Grin Big Grin Big Grin
This was a very sweet chapter, well done! I'm looking forward to the next one Wink

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05-04-2011, 10:25 AM (This post was last modified: 05-04-2011 10:27 AM by fontedivina.)
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(05-04-2011 10:22 AM)_Mai_ Wrote:  Timmy Big Grin Big Grin Big Grin

I've tried to invent the names that are similar to their real ones Smile

Yes, this chapter is full of sweet memories.

Thanks, @Mai hallo

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05-04-2011, 10:26 AM
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@fontedivina Smile Smile Smile

I like it! Very sweet! Smile
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05-04-2011, 10:32 AM
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I like this chapter very much Wink Good work @fontedivina!
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05-04-2011, 11:10 AM
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I like how you describe Taddys childhood. It's warm, sweet and emotional.
You are good writer. ok


(05-04-2011 07:57 AM)fontedivina Wrote:  There will be 15 chapters! yes

Do you already know what will be the end of your story?
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05-04-2011, 11:16 AM
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@January, @Kellunia, @Bina, thank you very much! Ylinlove I'm so glad you like it.

(05-04-2011 11:10 AM)Bina Wrote:  I like how you describe Taddys childhood. It's warm, sweet and emotional.

That's how I see it!

(05-04-2011 11:10 AM)Bina Wrote:  Do you already know what will be the end of your story?

Yes, because I have it written in my mother's tongue already! yes

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05-04-2011, 11:33 AM
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In russian, right?

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05-04-2011, 12:57 PM
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(05-04-2011 11:16 AM)fontedivina Wrote:  Yes, because I have it written in my mother's tongue already! yes

When I read a book I usually read the beginning, then the end and then I read it from begining to end. I just can't read it page by page not knowing what the end would be like.
But I guess it would be too much to ask if you could tell me how this story ends? Pray
I promise I won't tell anyonesilent
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05-04-2011, 02:11 PM (This post was last modified: 05-04-2011 02:12 PM by fontedivina.)
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(05-04-2011 11:33 AM)_Mai_ Wrote:  In russian, right?

Yep yes

(05-04-2011 12:57 PM)Bina Wrote:  When I read a book I usually read the beginning, then the end and then I read it from begining to end. I just can't read it page by page not knowing what the end would be like.
But I guess it would be too much to ask if you could tell me how this story ends? Pray
I promise I won't tell anyonesilent

@Bina, I have a friend who does the same! Big Grin But is it interesting to read when you know how it all ends? thinker And if you don't like the end, do you still go on with reading?

To say the truth I wouldn't like to tell anybody about the end of this story! Pray
I'd prefer to keep the intrigue!

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05-04-2011, 03:47 PM
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Don't tell the ending! It's much more interesting going step by step.. Smile

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05-04-2011, 04:01 PM
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your story!! so sweet! and don't tell the ending!! but I am very curious!! Smile
I love the story!!!Ylinlove

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05-04-2011, 04:03 PM
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PS: I think your chapters are a bit too short. You should give more details Big Grin I'm hungry for details! Big Grin For example, when I read when they met in a book store (or was it a library?), it was so cute but so short Nixweiss Please if it's possible, make your chapter more detailed Shy

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05-04-2011, 04:29 PM
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(05-04-2011 03:47 PM)_Mai_ Wrote:  Don't tell the ending! It's much more interesting going step by step.. Smile

Even if I'd tell, I'd tell it only to @Bina and she promised not to tell anybody joke

(05-04-2011 04:03 PM)_Mai_ Wrote:  PS: I think your chapters are a bit too short. You should give more details Big Grin I'm hungry for details! Big Grin For example, when I read when they met in a book store (or was it a library?), it was so cute but so short Nixweiss Please if it's possible, make your chapter more detailed Shy

I didn't plan to make this story long so this is the reason why the chapters seem short I think. As for details,I love them too yes But may be here I paid more attention to emotions and feelings, especially during the memories. But I'll try to give more details! I'll work on it.

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05-04-2011, 04:38 PM
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Spasibo! Knuddel

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05-04-2011, 09:18 PM
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Fontedivina, i love your story!!! Congratulations for you!!!! You have done a great job!!!!!!!!!!

It`s a good story, and i can see it in my head in front of me from the first sentence i started to read, which only happens with me if i LOVE a book, or stroy!!! Big Grin
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05-05-2011, 04:33 AM
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(05-04-2011 02:11 PM)fontedivina Wrote:  @Bina, I have a friend who does the same! Big Grin But is it interesting to read when you know how it all ends? thinker And if you don't like the end, do you still go on with reading?

When I read the end of story I'm more calm and I can enjoy the whole story. And I always read every book.

(05-04-2011 02:11 PM)fontedivina Wrote:  To say the truth I wouldn't like to tell anybody about the end of this story! Pray
I'd prefer to keep the intrigue!

I understand. I'd probably do the same if I were you
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05-05-2011, 12:08 PM
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Oh my!!! You are sooo talanted..... Luxhello
Your language is sooo poetic... Smile
Cant wait for more! Smile

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